Transfer!~Kane Demrosol

Posts : 792 Join date : 2012-08-19

Name: Kane Demrosol
Age: 17
Gender: Male
Eyes: Gold/Yellow
Hair: Blueish Black
Skin Tone: Pale
Body Type: Athletic
God|Titan|Primordial Parent: Hades
Mortal Parent: Mira Demrosol
Siblings:
Talents: He likes cemeteries, digging holes, and speaking with ghosts.
Flaws: He holds grudges, doesn't like using swords, and can be a bit of a pushover.
Powers: Umbrakinesis and Geokinesis. The biggest thing he can do with shadows is put out a large light, about 10 ft in diameter. He can use his power 10 times a day, they'll make him nearly pass out if he goes to his maximum once. He has to wait at least an hour between uses. Razz

Weapon: A special CB shovel that transforms from a charm on his bracelet. His bracelet's basically like Annabeth's invisbilty hat. Razz

Clothing: PIC^
History: Kane had an easy life. He lived in Japan for a year and learned Japanese. One day near his 17 birthday a Cyclops attacked him and his mother. He made it out alive, but his mother was killed. After hiding for a few months he heard about Camp Half-Blood and went there, fast as he could.
RP Example: I heard the Minotaur bellow behind me. "Damn it. It's close." I said angrily. It bellowed again. I looked forward. The tree was around 50 away. Just then the Minotaur rammed into me. I fell down and felt that I had broke a few ribs. I tapped my bracelet and became invisible. The Minotaur looked confused. I carefully snuck behind it, carefully taking out my shovel. When I was directly behind it, I quickly decapitated it and watched it's body fade away.

Picture: http://moe.animecharactersdatabase.com/uploads/chars/5688-617619611.jpg

Subject: Re: Transfer!~Kane Demrosol Sat Aug 25, 2012 12:14 pm

Uhm

I'll be straight up about this. Nico is a Canon/Gary Stue-esque character. If this character has ALL his powers then you have to flat out name them and limit them. Not give the short and simple term for a mass of different powers.

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I'll just keep the umbra and geokinesis. Edited.

Subject: Re: Transfer!~Kane Demrosol Sat Aug 25, 2012 12:17 pm

You still have to explain the powers and limit them....

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Edited.

Subject: Re: Transfer!~Kane Demrosol Wed Aug 29, 2012 5:59 pm

The geokinesis power needs to be limited more.

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Edited.

Subject: Re: Transfer!~Kane Demrosol Wed Aug 29, 2012 9:20 pm

The powers still need more limits, like how tired they make him, how long he has to wait between uses, how many times he can use them, stuff like that.

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Kay then...edited.

Subject: Re: Transfer!~Kane Demrosol Sun Sep 02, 2012 4:20 am

. .I don't know why no one mentioned this, or if they just didn't view it the same way, but geokinesis isn't a Hades power. Gaia wouldn't let him mess with her shit.

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Hades does have slight geokinesis powers being that everything underground is in his power.

Subject: Re: Transfer!~Kane Demrosol Sun Sep 02, 2012 3:51 pm

Moving large boulders, ten times a day, for his child, is too much if he only has "slight power" over it. Everything under the Earth is his dominion, not his power. Hades, Zeus, and Poseidon were given equal reign over the earth because Gaia was still present. If Hades gets geokinesis, so do Zeus and Poseidon, which makes much less sense.

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URGH. Forget it then. Edited.

Subject: Re: Transfer!~Kane Demrosol Sun Sep 02, 2012 6:17 pm

Sorry. Approved.

You didn't remove the part that says 'geokinesis'

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